And I am lost in thoughts that drown
As you stare at me with hungry eyes
I wonder if they are filled with lies
The love you have is it pretend
And when you reach out with your hand
Is it to help me or to stop
To block my path, to make me drop
I love the hunger in your eyes
But if it’s only filled with lies
Then you are in for quite a loss
Because you see I am the boss
And I forbid the tales you spin
They may entice but you won’t win
I will not be part of this sham
I’m telling you, you better scram
Once your attentions are exposed
To you my heart and soul are closed
I’ll leave you there alone to rot
And that’s the ending to your plot
Written July 5, 2021
Original Version
You look at me with hungry eyes
But those eyes are filled with lies
The love you have is all pretend
And when you reach out with your hand
It’s not to help me but to stop
To block my path, to make me drop
It’s you with hunger in your eyes
So let me satisfy those lies
I will pretend that you’re the boss
But then you’ll be in for a loss
Because my eyes will close shut
But those eyes are filled with lies
The love you have is all pretend
And when you reach out with your hand
It’s not to help me but to stop
To block my path, to make me drop
It’s you with hunger in your eyes
So let me satisfy those lies
I will pretend that you’re the boss
But then you’ll be in for a loss
Because my eyes will close shut
Leaving you there alone to rot
Written June 26, 2021
I believe I prefer your original version although I could not say why exactly. 🙂
ReplyDeleteHard to choose which one I prefer more. Both poems are a bit different from each other.
DeleteI like the first one it shares more feelings and insight and she is the survivor, lends hope to readers that have been in similar relationships. I believe many readers can relate to this one. I really love this piece, thank you for sharing.
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